
I believe in the future, we shall suffer no more
Maybe not in my lifetime, but in yours, I feel sure
These prayers are the memory of god
Sometimes even music cannot substitute for tears
Old man lying abed 22 years
Wasn’t old when he first crawled in
Then his blanket was blue as a goal post
White satin ribbon running on the edge
His skin like a cougar’s, electric and lithe
Long ago, thought he knew the score
Now his fantasies are all under the sheets
He lies there alone in reverie
Stealing a peek at his neighbors next door
I believe in the future, we shall suffer no more
It’s an ancient art or discipline
This ballet of hearts ramping up our pulse
We play the game on a fresh blue field
Daisies sprouting between our toes
Toes digging into earth black as oil
Sheets of rain blanket the earth, the moor
But we wrinkle and blanch at the rainbow
Giving our colors to a higher promise
Giving a promise to calm and assure
Maybe not in my lifetime, but in yours, I feel sure
Wake up, Old Man, Wake up
Stretch out your hand and grab mine
Like swans let us cavort and dip
Kick up dirt and shake the sheets
A May pole in the middle of our lives
We swing around the lightning rod
Electrified and shouting, Hallelujah!
The glinting sun, an Aztec dome, to cover
My heart and yours, clasped, our hands applaud
These prayers are the memory of god
Seventeen years and we’re still in bed
Rolling around like paired cougars
The sheets are all creased by the work of our hands
Paisley blue, are those diamonds on your feet?
I walk more swiftly than you, Old Man
Our music sweetened by the sound of crows
Sweetened by a recurring coda
Until we un-hat our heads and unplug our ears
And lazily float down the Missouri river
I’m on the east shore, watching you cross over
Old Man, wasn’t the last time our best souvenir?
Sometimes even music cannot substitute for tears
Sometimes even music cannot substitute for tears
These prayers are the memory of god
Maybe not in my lifetime, but in yours, I feel sure
I believe in the future, we shall suffer no more
Cabeza from --Paul Simon, Cool, Cool River

























Comments: 38
This is a wonderful form. I knew about it but never tried it until yesterday.
I like your text and your call to rejoice in the present and in the future.
The title is excellent. I can't see anything to change. The last stanza is my favorite.
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I did have to let go of my usual voice and play around on this one.
Maybe I just needs somthing more concrete (is that the right word?)...
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As I re-read it, though, there are rough spots. I am eager to fix them, but I need to be patient. I'm not sure how you do your revisions. Sometimes I can work on them with gusto, but usually it's best if I let the whole deal simmer and then introduce something entirely new, either a word or idea or action, then it all gels.
How do I do my revisions? Like Michelangelo, when asked how he sculpted David, answered: "I just chisel away everything that isn't David."
I have a couple picayune suggestions.
"art or discipline" ... make a choice.
There's no such thing as a recurring coda, a coda comes once, at the very end.
I've never seen a blue goal post and I can't picture a swan cavorting.
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re: swans, I had this in mind.
re: goal post, I'll rethink it. I want to suggest that the man did have goals, hopes, aims, but that they were abandoned for a while.
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Oh well, I tried! hehehe
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I believe in the future, we shall suffer no more
I hold tight to this belief. Very inspiring poem Susan.
Thanks Susan.
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Your poem is wonderful and touching